Well, there are really a lot of errors and problems. I suspect that it's just because your native language is not English ... so you are smart to try to get this up to business standards.
Here are a few more things to work on:
- The first sentance .... you don't "recognize a project" (it's just an awkward way to say something). I think you might want to say how you know about it ... that you saw it, was in it, read about it somewhere or learned about it in school.
- Secondly, you need to actually name the project you are talking about. Is it a building that they are constructing, is it an art installation, is photogrpahe or and ad campaign? Name what the project is. Not naming it and not saying how you know about it, just tells them that you sent then a cookie cutter cover letter .... and really didn't take any time to find out about the company.
- You should not use lower case "i"s ... it's net speak ... not proper business communications. You should refer to yourself as "I" ... in caps.
- The word "it's" is plural ... instead, you should say "its" in this case.
- The word "awsome" is not appropriate for a couple of reasons: The first, is that it's a word used by very young and immature people (it's slang), so you do not want to give that impression. And secondly ... it really doesn't tell them anything about why you like it ... awsome just means "awe inspiring". Anything can be awsome for dozens of different reasons. It's overused and doesn't really mean anything other than it makes you feel good. Not a professional observation. You need to say what you really think about this project. Is it something that is moving into the future, something that is cutting edge technology, something that inpires you to think, something that is ahead of it's competitors, something that will increase sales? That is the sort of thing you need to say.
- "reasin" is misspelled. "englich" is not only misspelled, it's slso not capatalized and neither is "albanian". County names and their languages need to be capatalized.
- The last sentance is awkward ... can't really understand what your goal is here. You say that you want to "to get to know your organisation and its work personally. ". I think you might mean to say that you would like to have to opportunity to meet them for an interview and to learn more about their organization.
There is a thread about cover letters and resumes for jobs and internships in this Careers forum ... you might want to search for that and read some of the suggestions in there. This needs a lot of work.
