Love the aesthetic of the commercial, and "Heart of Glass" is perfect because for me it always represented the darker side of disco... However, I think it's awkwardly messy, like Lynch had 1:30 to waste and didn't have any clue what to do with everyone in that time. Also, Raquel is the only one who should have been in the commercial.
I love the final shot though with the voiceover. The cinematography is perfect, it's so vintage but really executed well.