Okay! Well since this place is about feedback, I'll go ahead with some constructive criticism.
First of all when you are shooting, you really have to pay attention to the whole scene what is actually in the picture. To make sure you don't have distracting elements. In many of your shots you have a lot of other distracting elements such as trash, weird metal things, sticks, stuff and graffeti. All these things create a sort of visual 'noise' that detracts from the viewers ability to understand visually what they are looking at.
Number two, is the model. Always shoot the best model you can possibly find. Especially if you are shooting for yourself. Be picky. Models are not good just because they are models. Most models are generally pretty bad for portfolio work.
Makeup and hair: Get some! :-)
Styling: hmmm. Stylists do indeed help life, but it's more than that. You need to develop a sense of style. You don't really always need a stylist to put together something stylish. You need to develop your own sense of style so as to know a) what is style, b) what is fashion c) what looks bad in pictures d)when the stylist has no clue e) how to shoot the clothing.
Fashion photography is about the clothing in the end. It's got to be good. (this is however, easy to say. Much harder to implement)
Don't use fill flash, for now. Concentrate on capturing the light that is already there.
Emotion: Learn how to connect with the camera, model, light, situation. You are obviously in beautiful location, so learn to work with it. Learn when the light is good (sunset) and where it looks good. Learn to look into the models eyes and figure out who they are. Play with them, flirt with them, tease them, provoke them. Without emotion, images are flat and your creativity is seriously limited.
Light: This takes practice. Study online other peoples light, (daylight) learn to see the shadows, how they fall on a face. How the skin changes at different angles.
Enjoy!
dennison bertram
www.dennisonbertram.com