The Poetry Corner

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  1. purplelucrezia

    purplelucrezia New Member

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    Great poems Annako, I really like the second one. :flower:
     
  2. Annako

    Annako New Member

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    Thank you, I do to. The emotions attached to the second one are much deeper. ;)
     
  3. saad

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    i didnt know we had a poetry corner here!!! :woot: :woot:

    heres one i wrote in july 2001!!!! long time :shock:
    actually, i havent been writing poems lately...ive moved on i guess....

    by the way, we have some real talent here :flower: :heart: :innocent:



    When friends become strangers

    The moment -- the moment of suffocating silence
    That comes out of just another painful memory.
    The repercussion of building revulsion between two deceived souls
    As they stand on the thin line between being friends, or strangers.
    This is not hate, just awe -- anger for what may come…
    Tears make subtle paths down the contorted cheeks
    As one screams to the other to understand, to believe.
    Or maybe just to accept the bitter reality -- and let go.
    The hurt increases, for both -- even worse,
    Because of the love that is still there, will always be.
    For they will understand, they will believe… and they will know
    That this is not the end of a beautiful rapport, it is just…
    The moment -- the moment when friends become strangers
     
  4. saad

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  5. softgrey

    softgrey flaunt the imperfection

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    annako...beautiful sentiment...i :heart: a happy ending.... :flower:

    love yr 2nd one
     
  6. softgrey

    softgrey flaunt the imperfection

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    i strolled downtown
    i roamed the streets
    searching for
    that familiar beat

    the heart of the city
    the pulse of the town
    it seems the excitement
    has somewhat died down

    the artists are elsewhere
    the masses moved in
    it seems that my city
    is less than it's been

    i stop in a cafe
    to seek some relief
    and am somewhat surprised
    by the strength of my grief

    my city is changing
    that's certainly clear
    and it makes me ponder
    'what's left for me here...'

    but as i step back
    and look all around
    i remember "it's the best city
    i've ever found"

    i :heart: ny...




    :flower:
     
  7. model_mom

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    Nice poem. :flower: It seems that everything changes and being able to adapt to that change is a great quality. It seems like you really love NY no matter what.
     
  8. softgrey

    softgrey flaunt the imperfection

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    i do i do i do... :heart:

    adapting is not always easy...

    :flower:

    i'm trying to accept what i cannot change and change what i cannot accept...

    hey, i think that's my new mantra... :p
     
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    How come you never went to sleep?

    Read a post on "Whats on your mind?" that answers my question.
     
  10. softgrey

    softgrey flaunt the imperfection

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    i'm a night owl... :mellow:

    i'm fond of the shadows... :heart:

    i'm more inspired at night...i can just think more clearly...i'm not distracted by the day...it's free time... :flower:
     
  11. saad

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    something funny....:p


    with every move she makes
    she makes me smile
    she even makes me gargle on my bile

    o but i'm a flea
    i dont deserve that bee
    (it's against our traditions!) :cry:


    © copyright 2000 saad zuberi



    :rofl:
     
  12. slinky_vagabond

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    Funny

    Eyes fixed on me
    Approximating my reaction?
    Measuring my morals?
    Funny,
    I thought I made myself clear.
    An indecisive arm around my waist
    Casually enough to be friendly
    Low enough to mean more
    Funny,
    You aren't usually this shy.
    When you sigh I know it's up to me
    I hate making the first move
    But I want this enough to spread a hand over your chest
    Funny,
    I've never seen you look surprised.
    You take my other wrist
    And pull me into you
    And kiss me with lips still ashy
    From your last cigarette.
     
  13. softgrey

    softgrey flaunt the imperfection

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    hmm...ashy kisses...is that a good thing?>>> :huh:
     
  14. purplelucrezia

    purplelucrezia New Member

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    Hmm...I like it slinky_vagabond. B)
    Great poetry from everyone!
     
  15. saad

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    actually, this is a song....but dont tell anyone!! ninja:




    SORRY

    I’m standing in the limelight
    Accusations pouring in
    I try to shut it out but the fingers
    Keep pointin’
    These ice cold glares to haunt me
    And I can hardly breathe

    Put your arms around me and take me far away
    From this world of pseudo
    Saints and blurry days
    Someone’s closed his eyes and someone sits and prays
    But empty hearts surround me
    And the vile is building up
    Hate vines still creep over
    The walls of where we are

    This love won’t last too long
    If this is how we’ll go on
    There’s nothing in between us
    But still we’re far apart
    You can say you’re sorry
    But still you’ve broken my heart

    Everyone’s so panicked
    Time is running out
    Shoulders once to comfort me
    Now shruggin’s all they do

    Why don’t you feel my pain
    (It’s burned my world to ashes)
    Why don’t you listen hard
    (Maybe you would hear me cry)
    I’ve numbed myself for so long now
    (My tears have all run dry)

    Why don’t you understand
    There’s pleasure in small things said and done
    Not in this illusion
    I’ve waited for so long now
    In this state of confusion

    This love won’t last too long
    If this is how we’ll go on
    There’s nothing in between us
    But still we’re far apart
    You can say you’re sorry
    But still you’ve broken my heart

    This love won’t last too long
    If this is how we’ll go on
    There’s nothing in between us
    But still we’re far apart
    You can say you’re sorry
    But still you’ve broken my heart
     
  16. ahhGucci

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    Saad, love doesnt always lead to pain. But I feel yours :mellow: That is a nice song.
     
  17. saad

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    its not really a ove or hate song, aahgucci....actually, its not even supposed to be felt at on the individual level...urgh...i dont know if im aking sense or not...
    just re read it as if it's the whole world singing for the whole world.
    everybody's kind of blaming everybody for the hurt.
    imagine chorus :unsure:
     
  18. twilight fairy

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    im a beginner in poetry..i only write when the mood hits me. my poems suck, but there are hidden emotions in them,...and thats what matters, i guess.

    final poem
    i don't want to feel,
    don't want to be trapped here,
    you can make it all stop.
    just the pull of your hand,
    i'd feel the familiar touch,
    which i have suffacted for.
    but your hand is holding someone else,
    leading her into the field of flowers.
    as you turn around, and your eyes lock with mine,
    i can almost see the uncertainty.
    but i am mistaken..fooled again.
    now, there isn't anymore crying.
    no answer.
    just dripping.
    drip
    drip
    drip
    there goes another life, unnoticed.
    and all she wanted was to be loved.


    goodbye
    out of the sea, both of us have been chosen
    to flow downstream, down the long river bend.
    there've been frigid times when the river turned frozen,
    but it always moved on, managing to mend.

    the storms and the rain sometimes caused over flowing,
    still, all this bad weather was presently gone.
    and even at times when the sun wasn't glowing,
    the river would stop, and wait until dawn.

    yet, intergrity could not fight god's power
    the river was ought to take to seperate ways.
    every bend, every fall, every day, every hour
    it always recalls foregone, blissful days.

    even when seperated, it's still much adhere,
    as it is one whole...one vast, pensive tear.

    sorry for the pessimism :ninja:
     
  19. purplelucrezia

    purplelucrezia New Member

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    Such amazing work from you both. I would love to hear your poem sung saad.
    Both very melancholy... :cry:
     
  20. faust

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    crystalized, your second poem is really beautiful.
     

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